Author's Note: After we learned about defense mechanisms we read three stories about people who utilized different mechanisms in there life. To conclude the whole project we were asked to create short story with a defense mechanism in it. With this KBF came to life.
The Idea
It was a brisk morning in the city of Green Bay. The snow was falling at just the right pace to make sure the ground always remained with that perfect layer of snow. Even when the local traffic went by, their tracks vanished to let an untouched blanket of snow remain. Sitting in a brand new 2012 Audi R8 Spyder were two best friends, Bailey and Tyler. Their 18th birthdays were today and they both had the same plan; get a lottery ticket that could win them lifetime tickets to the Super Bowl. Bailey and Tyler’s families were loaded with money and were willing to send them to the every single Super Bowl; however, the boys didn’t like the easy way out.
As Bailey started his brand new car, all 560 horses roared to life. While the powerful V-10 sent the blood coursing through his veins, sweat began to form on Bailey’s hands as each finger touched the heated, leather steering wheel.
They rerouted their journey to the local Mobil gas station to make sure they pass Lambeau Field, because they believed that it would give them luck, when trying to win the lottery ticket that could win them a trip to every single Super Bowl in their lifetime. They were about to pass Lambeau, when they came to a screeching halt.
They couldn’t believe their eyes. Brett Favre was in town signing autographs. The boys hated Brett with the same intensity that girls love Taylor Lautner (Jacob!), boys hate Justin Bieber, and America hated Osama Bin Laden.
Bailey screamed, “WE’RE KILLING BRETT FAVRE!!!”
Tyler, puzzled as always, screamed, “YES! But how?”
“MWAHAHAH! I thought you’d never ask. We are going to have a blood thirsty Viking riding a chariot being pulled by a bear and a lion. Then…then, to humiliate him even more we will tie him on the goal post in a peace sign shape wearing an Aaron Rodger jersey and the famous CHEESEHEAD! ”
“WH… oooh, the NFC North Division, main rivals, gotcha. Nice idea; LET”S F’IN KILL BRETT FARVE!!!”
“That traitor messed with the wrong guys.”
The Killing
The killing started out with the boys luring Brett Favre to the Practice Field across the street. There the boys have bought a Viking, Lion, and Bear to do the killing. Afterwards, they would deny killing Brett Favre. In their mind they felt that theoretically the Bear, Lion, and Viking actually killed Brett Favre, and they didn’t actually kill him with their hands. So if they denied whatever they were asked their life would become as smooth as silk. For visual proof they will have a video recording. Henceforth their yellow brick road had deny written all over it. After the brainstorming they began plan “KBF” aka Kill Brett Favre.
“Hey Brett. We are your BIGGEST fans and were wondering if you could come over and see our football team play in the practice field” said Bailey.
Tyler added “Yeah that would be AMAZING”!
Brett thought for a bit and concluded, “It should be a short trip, why not”.
Tyler and Bailey smiled at each other and yelled, “THANK YOU SO MUCH”.
After Brett Favre meet and autographed with the last 13 people in line, he began to walk with the boys. A sudden thought came to Bailey’s mind.
Bailey saw that Favre on the phone and whispered, “We forgot that we have to cut Brett to let blood go out; therefore, the bear and lion can sniff it and always know where he is”.
Tyler whispered, “Don’t worry already have that covered”. He then nodded to Brett’s hand. Drip Drip Drip … Bailey noticed the small river of blood oozing out of Brett’s middle finger. The best part was Favre didn’t notice it. Bailey smiled at Tyler and went on walking with infamous quarterback.
The next step of the plan began when they were about to enter the field. They strategically placed cameras throughout the field so they could watch the killing from the outside. With this, they could place the Cheesehead on Brett and push him into the killing area and let their little evil selves sit outside and peacefully watching the gruesome event.
The moment before they entered the doors, Tyler put on the Cheesehead. Then with a sense of victory they both said, “Goodbye M*****F*****” and pushed him to his doom. The boys ran at full speed to the hideout and watched KBF come to life.
Brett stood there in the center of the spotlight without a clue of what is going on. A rumbling came from the corner of the field as well as a mysterious battle cry. One thing came to his mind. RUN! At full speed he ran into the blackness hoping for the exit only to come face to face with a lion and bear.
The Viking shouted, “ATTACK!!!” In unison, the bear and lion clawed at Brett’s skin. Flesh came off him, like a person cutting into butter with a knife. Pieces were thrown everywhere. As every moment passed Brett became smaller and smaller. The Viking shouted “Stop”. The bear and lion stopped only to leave a fleshless Brett standing. The body fell apart; his arms shriveled and fell downward, the eyes fell down from the head of the bloody body. The Viking stepped off his chariot, rumbling the ground with every step. As he stepped in front of the body of what once was Brett Favre, he took out his axe and with a mighty swing cut him right in half. Blood squirted everywhere. This got the lion n’ bear really hyped, like 10 year old girls at a Selena Gomez concert. The Viking, full of himself, got onto his chariot, and whispered in the bear n’ lion’s ear, “eat”.
At once the bear n’ lion devoured Brett Favre piece by piece. With every waning second, another part of his body vanished into the mouth of the beasts. Within a mere minute there was no sign of the infamous traitor, other then the blood scattered throughout the green and white field. The guys flicked the light three times to give the signal for the Viking to stop. The magnificent, blood stained chariot went off into the darkness never to be found again.
The Aftermath
They felt the rush in their body and made their aftermath plans before proceeding. Also, after the boys realized they forgot multiple steps in the killing, they concluded this was better than they planned. Bailey immediately went into denial mode and took out all the cameras. Tyler ran to the front and to make sure no one was looking in the process. The next thirteen minutes was a big blur for the boys: the taking out of the equipment, the destruction of the secret hideout and the silent ride home. All of this seemed to make Tyler’s brain distorted. Gruesome, bloody pictures seemed to go through his mind downward through every part of his body and soul. Additionally denial just wasn’t in his system, the truth felt right to him. He finally broke the silence.
With guilt in every word he said, “Did we do the right thing?”
Bailey replied, “Of course, we killed our worst enemy”
“But did we really do the RIGHT thing?”
“Don’t worry about it just deny, deny, deny and “AAL izz Well” (3 Idiots)”
“I don’t know if I could tell a lie for the rest of my life, eventually the truth will come out. You know this about me Bailey.”
“I forgot … fine. Let’s make this simple.”
“Ho…” Before Tyler could even finish his sentence Bailey took out a gun, and took one shot. Smack dab in the middle of Tyler’s forehead was a big gauging hole with blood pouring out like Niagara Falls. Bailey made sure no one was looking and threw Tyler’s body on the street for the citizens of Green Bay to see an innocent boy killed by a psychopathic maniac on the run.
Interesting story. You used a lot of good diction but could have hidden the defense mechanism a little more. Kind of a scary though.
ReplyDeleteHey that how I roll!
ReplyDeleteThe story had great diction, but I felt the character and situation to be somewhat unrealistic... Great description thought.
ReplyDeleteThanks Nolan; but, when did someone say it had to be realistic?
DeleteI really liked how you used me in the story. I have always wanted to kill someone. jk jk. I thought it was interesting how you broke your story up into three creative parts. Finally, I think you could have used more literary techniques and at times your story dragged on.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bailey. Next time I'll try to have more literary devices next time.
DeleteI really like your creativity with this story. It was a little gory though, and I feel really bad for Tyler. As far as writing, you did a good job of using analogies (like Taylor Lautner, Justin Beiber, and Osama bin Laden). They made it interesting to read. I think you may have been switching tenses at the beginning of section two though, so watch out for grammatical things.
ReplyDeleteBy the way, I like your map of the Middle East
Thanks Ryan. By the way that's India! :)
DeleteI liked how you incorporated different flaws in society. You not only had the two boys making sports and media their reality, but also showed peer pressure in action, showed how blatantly teenagers as well as others swear so easily, and to top it off pointed out that there are so many examples of the media showing us that all of these shows like CSI or criminal minds with bloodthirsty serial killers are rubbing off on our minds. I enjoyed that you were brave enough to confront such outright problems in such a brutally revealing short story. I think your syntax and voice could have been stepped up, but overall, great job Sri!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the excellant comment Liam. I didn't actually meant to include ALL of those things but I'll take credit. :)
DeleteLoved the premise of the plot, but I think you probably could have stepped up your game on sentence structure and variety. Liked it overall, but a tad gory. Not as bloody or gory as Nolan's, though.
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